Fools on Parade
Candy center crunch
Was my favorite once
Now it's 340
Watching Fireworks
Dad says they are special for me
Mrs. Weiss taught otherwise
Running through sprinklers
That turned on at 6pm
Now that's debrief time
Hide and go seek
The best part of shopping
Traded for sales
Frosted fingers
Covering guilty smiles
Are now stained green
Undershirts
Once my worst enemy
A closet staple
These haiku do a nice job honoring the traditional spirit and conventions of haiku, while still seeming fresh and inventive. Great job subtly alluding to the season in every single one. As for the cutting word convention, I do see it working for you in some of these. The one that has the best "cut" in terms of surprising line turn that forces a new understanding is the one that starts "Hide and go seek." That really feels like a haiku in the traditional sense, while still being modern. Nice!
ReplyDeleteLove these! So simple but not stupid, like a lot of modern haiku. My favorite is the last one. Very very relatable about the undershirts being a worst enemy
ReplyDeleteI loved the theme of growing up that you included in each haiku! They were really fun and playful. I enjoyed reading each one!
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