LOVE IS A GENTLE THING, YOURS IS THICKER THAN A VELVET RING


 I am Wreathed in a red gown of your care. 

Ruby studs slowly creep from my neck, 

Reluctantly joining the rose lace adorning my chest. 

My arms are wrapped in blood lace, 

So fine no one can see the cuts 

You put so much attention into. 

It is most admirable at my stomach. 

There the incisions are made sharp and deep, 

The blood flows profusely and freely 

Creating the world's first all organic maxi skirt. 

It pools around my feet, 

Hiding the stilettos you gave me, 

The ones your mother gave you,

And her mother gave her. 

The one’s which stop me from running. 

Which force me to stand here in an ocean of myself,

But I cannot find my reflection in my excess. 

When I look down I see someone else. 

I see a girl toying with a magnificent ruby choker,

I see a girl adjusting her real lace sleeves,

I see a girl twisting her rose fabric skirt. 

I see a girl loving her first real heels. 

I see the girl you have always wanted. 


Comments

  1. This is one of the most powerful poems I've read from the class all semester. It's experimental in some ways, but it also packs a punch. I have a lot to say about this one, and I feel strongly we should discuss it in class tomorrow. I am looking forward to it!

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  2. your descriptions are so beautiful and gruesome and horrific and also elaborate and intricate. It's so impressive how your poem holds both a haunted feel and also beauty. the line "Creating the world's first all organic maxi skirt." ahh I can't get over. it's horrific and so creative.

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  3. This poem is crazy and so powerful. the intensity of the words hit so perfectly in a way that really makes you look deeper into each line. Like they're too heavy to mean just one thing. I'll share more of my thoughts on the interpretation in class but what I got from it was this deep feeling of feminine generational trauma and you did it so perfectly. My only critique would be putting the word "maxi skirt" in. I love the imagery but I just felt that specific word took me out of this fantastical, red queen realm. I feel you could probably replace maxi with something simple like long or honestly just take out the word altogether.

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